The next step to writing my first draft
is writing an introduction, or lead, for my paper. To do this I
followed step one of exercise 4.3 in The Curious Researcher.
This required me to write three leads based on the types of leads
presented in the book:
1. Why are there so many people who
seem to get riled up about deforestation? How much harm does it
really do? What can be done to deal with the issues associated with
deforestation? Such questions have occurred to many people at one
time or another, but the answers are often hard to discover. Most of
the information on the topic seems to be just another radical
environmentalist ranting about the evils of humanity. Those sources
that aren't ranting are often confusing, or try to be so academic
that no one can understand them. After all, what is the relevance of
economic indicators of agroforestry techniques in Legal Amazonia? I
encountered much of this myself initially, turning me off to the
reality of deforestation and making me skeptical of what seemed to be
exaggerated doomsday reports. It turns out that deforestation is
a problem, but the implications are more complex than just global
warming and killing some tree frogs.
2. Deforestation is a major problem in
today's world. Such a major problem that much of the worlds' forests
are depleted beyond the point of no return. The major deforestation
occurring in modern times takes place mostly in developing countries,
who are ill-equipped to deal with the issues associated with it. In
the past, other countries have also gone through a period of
deforestation in their history, but all of them have dealt with it in
time to prevent complete destruction. This paper will attempt to
show why the developing countries of the past were able to deal with
the problem, while modern developing countries are not. From the
conclusions of this explanation the paper will then attempt to give a
reasonable way of dealing with deforestation.
3. Noah and his older sister walk down
the dirt road to the beginning of the forest path, their first such
walk since having gotten back from America, where they stayed for
four years. As they walk, Noah remembers the forest hikes he used to
take; how the edge of the forest was like a three hundred foot wall
of vegetation and as soon as you entered it twilight enveloped you,
how the trees would tower on all sides massive and ancient. Now as
he turned onto the path he was disappointed to find that beyond the
initial trees there was a large cleared area with nothing but ferns
growing, an old field abandoned because of the inefficiency of the
slash-and-burn methods used to clear it. After crossing the massive
cleared area, the two of them enter the forest, but this forest is
not like Noah remembers it. This forest is made of sparse trees with
little undergrowth. Further on the forest abruptly stops, opening
into a clearing the size of a town. This clearing is almost devoid
of standing trees, most of them having been cut down by the loggers
who recently went through. As Noah and his sister pick their way
across the area they come upon one of the objects of all the
destruction, one of the giant rainforest trees. Three hundred feet
tall and ten feet in diameter, it is lying on the ground with one
fifteen foot section taken out of its trunk to be cut into boards;
the rest is left to rot on the forest floor.
Phillip Anderton, long time African
missionary and naturalist, used to quote the statistic that eighty
percent of the wood cut down by loggers is wasted. A shocking
statistic when one realizes the extent to which deforestation has
been carried on in some countries. In Haiti only one 1.4 percent of
the land is still covered in forests, a figure down from 30 percent
early last century (McClintock 2). Many other countries are well on
their way to joining Haiti in near total deforestation. Something
must be done to slow this damaging rate of destruction.
Interestingly enough, the last lead is
the one I wrote before I read the exercise. As I was reading the
different types of leads in my textbook I noticed that the example
for the scene lead the book used destruction of tropical rainforests
as an example topic, and talked about describing what the land looks
like after the loggers have left. I must be doing something right!
Noah, I'm not sure who you've identified as your primary audience for your essay on deforestation, but if you want to reach an audience who is largely unfamiliar and maybe even skeptical of the topic, I think your first lead could engage precisely that audience.
ReplyDeleteI think your last lead is the best. It is very personal and has a lot of your voice in it. I wouldn't be afraid to use the word "I" in you lead either
ReplyDeleteI like the last lead because you added personal details and it was your voice. It was written with detail but not an over abundance.
ReplyDeleteI think that your last introduction was the most effective because it had a personal touch to it and it was interesting and playful, which definitely is good to keep the audience's attention. In the midst of all this, you still maintained your topic and answered some of the "who what where when and why". I really enjoyed your last introduction.
ReplyDelete#3 is more personal and emphasizes your voice
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed reading the last one. It really held my attention, and really showed your voice.
ReplyDeleteBelieve it or not I liked number 2 the best. It was concise and to the point and let the reader know exactly what he/she is in for.
ReplyDeleteNumber 3 is definitely the one! It is the one that mostly voices your own thought and it is something that the reader will feel more likely to read than something starting right off with statistics and facts. Great work overall!
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